Draft Feedback

On December 5th we handed in our first draft. We were given some feedback on how we could improve our film to make it better. When we handed it in we knew we were short of footage by about 30 seconds and so this was our first point we needed to improve on for the final draft in a weeks time. Here was our feedback:

• Our voice over was too early in the film so if you were to miss the first 10 seconds of the film the theme wouldn't be as clear. Also the speech "brain activity" wasn't very clear and was read to quickly. In order to improve on both of these points we will look at changing the placement of the voice over in the chronological order of the film. We will also re-record the voice over to slow down the speech and clearly pronounce all the words. 
• There was a wobbly shot. Our tracking shot that we filmed at the train station was wobbly which looked unprofessional. In order to change this we will experiment on Premier to try and stabilise the shot.  
• Too many flashes to black. After the first few shots flashed to black it lost its effectiveness and started to make it annoying, they also lasted to long, as the original idea was for it to look like a blink. In order to improve this we will experiment on Premier using different video effect and transitions to keep our audience interested.
• Slow down the shot where Libby is looking at the scrapbook as the scrapbook is supposed to be an important prop within the film. We can improve this by editing the shot on Premier and slowing down the speed/duration to make it last longer. 
• The shot which has the teacups in is too dark and a different contrast of black and white compared to the other black and white shots. In order to improve this we will make sure that all of our black and white shots have to same brightness.
• One of the titles is missing from a shot so we will need to add that back on and check that all the other titles are included and correct.
• The title of our film comes in too late and needs to feature earlier as only trailers show the title at the end of the clip. To improve this we will play around with where we could have the title come in but making sure it doesn't give away the concept of the film.  
• They liked the first shot of the lift.
• They thought that the titles that are pushed by the train work well and show good use of editing.